The Last Dance

Description

"People always said that life is sweet but nah,its bittersweet.
My parents died years ago and my good old pal went to the overseas to continue his studies
so its just me,myself and I"

 

'Deep inside,
where nothing is fine,
I've lost my mind.
'


"Kai,what is wrong with you? Let's start again" the instructor told him as she shook her head
"Okay,I can do this" he pants and stood up again to dance.


" My life is dark until she came into my life"

 

"Hey,are you okay?" a girl poked him and pulled him up so that he is sitting down.
"Yeah,I guess" he whispered.
"Guess? uhm I think you're thinking too much that's why" she pouts as she told him.
He sighed and said "I'm fine".
She smiled and pulled him up for him to stand up and starts to dance for their rehearsal
"wha-what are you doing?" he stuttered.
"helping you Kim Jongin" she grinned.


"She is my happiness,my happy pill"

"Teach me how to waltz Mr.Kim!" she giggled as she told him
He chuckled and shakes his head.
"Stop calling me that!"

 

"I will sing this song
And I will return to you
Your beautiful self again
I will listen to this song with you
And dance for the last time
Remember this moment
Forever if you must
Just one last dance"

I'm sorry
I don't deserve you,you deserve someone much more better than me.
Thank you for everything.

You know that I love you so much right?



and they danced together for the last time

Foreword

Welcome welcome!
I'm back from being a reader and stepping up my game to be an author lol
This is for a oneshot contest held by the great talented writer,vanillasushi.Wish me luck!

I'm using the song prompts,number 4.

"I will sing this song
And I will return to you
Your beautiful self again
I will listen to this song with you
And dance for the last time
Remember this moment
Forever if you must
Just one last dance"
-Big Bang,Last Dance

 

I really enjoyed this song and it has a deep meaning.
When I saw the song in the prompts,I was like asdfghjkl okay I must choose this lolol
My ideas are mostly angst so... here it is!
This fanfic is based on Kai's POV

I hope you guys will like it and enjoy!


This is the another version of the poster! Thank you again for spearmint graphics by carnation! Her artworks are just amazing!

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ATTENTION
DON'T FORGET TO LISTEN TO BIG BANG THE LAST DANCE WHILE READING THIS FANFIC

WARNING
THIS ONESHOT IS SLIGHTLY DARK AND ANGSTY
SO PREPARE A TISSUE Y'ALL (IT CAN BE NORMAL AND WON'T MAKE YOU CRY LOL)


Check out my other stories!:
Let me love you (Chanyeol X OC)
He's not mine (Kaistal X OC)
The passion of art (Krissica)

 

 

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x169618x #1
Chapter 1: The moment when jongin started coughing blood, i was like 'no no no no please no. Don't let him sick' and boom! He got cancer :( asdfghjkl and the moment when they waltzed together for the last time :(:( it's so sad:(
vanillasushi
#2
Chapter 1: This was kind of sad... The moment he started coughing and getting sick, I was just "no... cancer is not the reason, it's not..." but it is... I read another entry where Jongin had cancer too and I'm just T___T why!!!!!!!!! The last part though,, made my heart clench so hard...

I really like how you managed to pull off the centre alignment while writing this one shot... I've always thought it would be hard to do since I could never pull it off. So kudos on that! Your grammar was a little off though, like sometimes it's in past tense and the next moment it's in present. It irked me a little but that didn't mean I have problems reading or understanding your one-shot! Also, I think you might want to work on the paragraphing, because it is hard to read when you clump all your dialogues in one paragraph. So what writers normally do, is giving a new paragraph to a new dialogue, I'll give you an example...

"You told me that last time," I rolled my eyes.

"I know," he sniggered. "I'm telling you again."

Something like that. Because otherwise it gets confusing to read and makes the paragraph a little too dense. Oh, and also! it's "sunbaenim" not "subaenim"... But I highly recommend you not to use romanised Korean, especially if they're words you don't know or words that you're unsure of. Other that that, I don't think there is anything else for me to critique on!

Thank you so much for joining Blossom Roads! I hope this will motivate you to write more and to improve because it is always nice to see writers improving the more they write! Good luck on your future works!

xoxo
Queentrelle-- #3
Chapter 1: Aw, truly bittersweet! I can feel how hard life must been for Jongin. The part where the girl came into his life is kind of really short I wish you could've written more about their progress, their relationship but I understand about school, ugh f school. Haha kidding. The girl is so funny with what she said about her height but I don't know, is she nineteen really? Haha, sometimes it's confusing but who am I to judge? (Like duh I don't even know how I can write something readable in a guy's pov) And oh, the angst :(

congratulations! Fighting for your next stories!