Chapter 1: Agreed with the first comment down there about a straight Jaehyun fic, and I must say, this was very interesting.
Perhaps you could have fleshed out the fact that she's still very much in love with him throughout the story rather than tell us this at the end in the short note. That would have been very cool to read about! Nonetheless, the idea was still well-conveyed, and I especially enjoyed their conversations. Short and fleeting, which achieved a great deal of impact and managed to flesh out the extent of her horror that he was still present.
Lovely short story, and you get an upvote from me because it's fresh and was a very delightful thing to stumble upon by chance. Good job!
Chapter 1: Wow... I'd have been more happy if it was longer... But I can't bear the pain of my ship sinking even before sailing...
But... It has really nice plot and characters for horror story (well.. Long horror story)
I couldn't really feel her.. Maybe it's because it was too short... There was not enough moments or information or cases... Yeah.. The only dissatisfying thing is, it's too short..... But I really liked it!!! (do I make sense?) Anyway... I'm cheering for you!! I can see the potentials in you.. Maybe, if you keep writing and improving, you might become my favourite writer XD
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