Dead End

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White lotus flower bloom, yellow petals and flower arrangements floating around. But most enchanting are the wooden boots, with letters she has never seen written on the screen of the paper enlighten by a candle behind the sheets. Almost magically as if affected by the tides they seem to follow the pull of the moon following up the stream further and further away until they vanish and other boats pass by. It’s this mysterious trice when the moon is about to set and the sun waiting to rise. The air is full of secrets and tension and the sky changes from the darkest black of the night to softest pastel colors.  

 

warning this story can contain:
character dead, slightly mention of violence, and angst.
If you feel uncomfortable with those things this story won't be for you.

Foreword

A story written for The Bridal Mask Prompt Contest

 

Used Prompt:
11. A supernatural story about a forest with a gateway to a Labyrinth of the dead. A group of friends decide to check it out but they soon find themselves unable to find their way out. What's worse is that the Grim Reaper chases to capture their souls forever. 

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DGNA_Forever #1
Chapter 8: This was a beautiful story! It reminded me a bit of the Maze Runner concept, but different still. I felt so bad for Hoya, especially, and was sad to see people die, but at the same time, it made sense and was satisfying. I really liked the way you ended it, too. It was a nice close to a good story♡.
DGNA_Forever #2
Chapter 4: Oh my...This just turned scary! I hope it will turn out okay.
DGNA_Forever #3
Hi, there! I was wondering if you could possibly take your story off of "non text selectable" momentarily, so I can put your beautiful poster on your entry! Please let me know. Thank you!
-Tigress- #4
I love your story my dear ♡
-Tigress- #5
Chapter 8: I won't say this is sad, not again lol. In the horrid way that Sulli deserved her in, there is also the what if and if only, but alas. It is what it is.
I really love what you had added to the end, the bit that I hadn't already read. The line about leaving her most precious thing behind really clues in that all of this is her fantasy and that is... I said I wouldn't say it but I must... that is sad but also it helped her to deal with everything. So then I think that the flashes to the other reality are more like flashes of ACTUAL reality, and her mind is being shocked out of its fantasy momentarily before she allows herself to fell in more. The addition of the pomegranite was inspired! I loved that little tidbit of a play on Hades and Persephone, but also the symbolism of the blood/juice on her fingers. Brilliant.
The end. Those words are sad to read but also I am very very proud of you!!! You completed TWO chaptered stories in just two months! You should be very proud of yourself!!!
-Tigress- #6
Chapter 7: oh oh and I love that last line. "Sometimes she needs to be miserable". That is so true and my, it's a beautifully poignant line
-Tigress- #7
Chapter 7: Ah man. T.T Again with the what if's and if only's!!! >.< But that is so realistic about life in general: what if we did this, if only we didn't do that... but hindsight is 20/20, as they say. Really nice way to show that even though the possibilities will probably haunt me forever hahaha. =D
You know, what we were talking about with the one rule? I think you did that well here. Like there is only one lead, and that is Sohee, and since it's focused so strongly on her it is as if the rest of them are just mentions to get her to her goal. And that's not a bad thing, either: it makes her relly stand out in the midst and show her character as being tired of the world and people in general. Chorong is your exception here and I do feel that you did it that way on purpose because well, her friend is one of the only things still tying her to the world of the living.
Again, the way her mind takes her elsewhere is amazing. I love the way you did that and the way that is pieces together the alternate story as well as showing a deeper glimpse into her character.
-Tigress- #8
Chapter 6: Oh goodness this was so sad. Like poor her and all because they grew afraid and ran. But also I like the hinted alternate reality in that it was from the buillding, that's such a neat way to put this. I like Jiyong's involvement in this, too, because it's like he is there for her even though he shouldn't be. Or should he? Like he has always been there for her because she ahs always courted death? That's an interesting thought 0.o
But oh man if ONLY! there are so many if only's in this and it makes me sad!!!! But again, I guess that's the way that suicide and life play out, that's really sad.
-Tigress- #9
Chapter 5: UGH Krystal *sad* I haven't read your response to my comment last night yet so I don't know if it had anythign to do with her sister as well as the whole boyfriend stealing thing, but regardless it is still sad. I really love the way the flashbacks start here... showing how the trauma around her pulls out the turmoil and remembered trauma within her. That's a really cool way to show that we never get over things, but we instead bury them and pretend to get past them. well done!
The imagery was gorgeous, I could picture Ciel so well and I LOVED the way you pulled in her name with meaning! Very clever to do it that way!!! I like the riddles a lot, especially the final one... and again, my heart kind of broke a little when Sohee knew the answer so easily. T.T The poor girl!
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