Chapter 1: Was it just me or was this story really personal? Like, I am so self councsious throughout the story by imagining you, the author, being in a situation similar to this one! Did you base this on a dream of yours? Because that would be really clever (and awesome) if you wrote a story like this with that ending which just happens to be true in the sense that it has happened before. Mind blown.
Chapter 1: Oh damn that was deep! It's quite short though, I kind of want more XD Like, the girl starts writing and he keeps appearing in her dreams or maybe even in real life! Idk how tho, but with your imagination I'm sure you'll figure it out :D On the other note, your wrtiting skills are really good so please keep writing stories, the add needs more good authors like you
Chapter 1: It, indeed, does look like a way of put down your thoughts. At first, when I read foreword, I had thought you were just messing, but now I see you don't, since it does indeed have to do with your story, if not the main point. I had many parts that I disagreed, at first, but as I got closer to the point, I began to understand where you were, or he was coming. Still I don't totally agree, because although many people wouldn't appreciate what they have if it wasn't for the opposites, some people still would.
Chapter 1: I feel like the story is in a way about you? If it is it's definitely a nice way to put your thoughts into words and share it with maybe someone that feels the same. I love how you described the scenery and the actions. It almost sounded poetic. I think you did a good job. However for how good this OS is your foreword is such an oversimplification. This was amazing but your foreword does not reflect that.
But anyway, good job at writing this. :)
Chapter 1: this story is great! it remind my life a little! living in pressure!?
it's terse! I didn't get tiredof reading it as a person who English isn't her mother tongue!
I'm looking forward to your next stories** fighting.
Chapter 1: Wowowowow. U say that u haven't written a lot (coming from your foreword), but u seem so skilled! The tranquility in this story was soothing and awesome to read. It was interesting to see the transitions of their conversation, from where she was thinking about how nobody cared for her, to how she realised what a perfect world should be, then to how she should change herself for the better to please herself and nobody else. I really liked it! I encourage u to continue writing!
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