Chapter 8: That last line though xD

I don't know what to make of Jongin's character here though. He still seems somewhat mysterious to me.

Chapter 8: Ah Krease (my phone auto corrected that to grease far too many times) you da man (sorta)

I think Haneul should chill a little about Nini bear even though I feel awful about the Jongdae thing :(

You is back! <3

Chapter 7: Maybe daaru wala daaru.

I feel like such a child reading this somehow ;_; everyone seems so grown up.

*insert dramatic music* hawww Jongdae is there :O

Chapter 6: *insert filmy sad daaru drinking song*

Haneul, you need more friends. Please.

Chapter 5: I may or may not be in love with Jongin. <_< that's a different story.

You're style has changed for sure, but not for the worse. I like this pace. It's interesting and comfortable.

Chapter 2: Hey hey hey~ So far I'm loving this story a lot. I love the interaction among the characters and I'm so happy that you didn't limit the interaction between Haneul and Jongin only. There are things that are bothering me though: the dialogues and punctuation. Can you make another paragraph when another person speaks?

Example:

"Hey Jane!" Logan greeted.

Jane's steps were halted and she slowly lifted her head to face Logan. "Hi," she replied, "Logan."

He smiled before he ruffled her hair. "Coffee after school?"

Jane shrugged. "Sure."


And the punct:

"I hate monkeys," he said.

See that comma?

I hope that this won't offend you >< You have a really good writing style and it'd be a pity if people are hindered from reading your story just because of these matters. Fighting! C:

Chapter 3: Damn it Jongdae :/


I know where this is going. ;_; so I'm happy :3

Chapter 2: omg can't wait for the two of them to bump into Dae's concert (assuming that they do) *_*

Chapter 1: Oh wow. Everyone is adult-ing so hard here o.o

Chapter 2: I love Yuri. She's my spirit animal here. I'm glad you figured out what you wanted to write. Writer!Jongin tho *_*