Chapter 1: The way you wrote KiKwang's character was very good! Your style of writing is great too! The only thing I'd have to say is your commas. You've placed them in places you shouldn't have, and you didn't place them where you needed them. For example: "The door to the rooftop opened up and they both spun, seeing Doojun who was clenching his fist." That's your original text, but the correct way should be: "The door to the rooftop opened, and they both spun seeing Doojun who was clenching his fist." But don't be discouraged. Keep writing and reading, and you'll eventually get it. I was in your shoes too, but I kept reading and writing, and now I'm a lot better than I used to be. Of course, I'm still in the process of learning new things. Keep up the good work, and for sure, one day, you'll overcome your obstacles. Great job! Plus, congratulations on being featured! I found this story because of that!
It's completed? I think it must have a sequel... XD<br />
Gikwang is psycho?? Hahaha.. I can't imagine he's being a psycho... Lol!<br />
Nice fanfic, I like it.. ^^
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