Chapter 13: YOOOO I forgot to comment on this but akjlsdnla
I'm dying Halsey would be me "nah man this isn't real" and just nope the outta there LOL
I do like how there's a lot of characters that are mentioned even though they aren't the main characters, it's really well thought out !!
LOLOL "Adopted, I assume." Lily was very asian and Theo was a pasty white. Me: damn u right tho
ANYWAYS, I loooove the way you're setting this up: there's a focus on the powers but a lot of the story is structured through the girl's lives and perspectives!!
I'm really excited to see the other girls thoughts in the next one ~
Chapter 12: There is so much to take in (lol!)
My favorite part was when they transformed. Even though I can't really imagine what their clothes looked like, the colors!! Gray, blue, green, red and pink. It corresponds to their respective elements so it's very interesting for me especially since I couldn't get it at first. Lily's hair!! And Halsey's and Phil's!! I like the idea that their hair can change color and style's when they transform. I also like how in the beginning you managed to pull off a TON of cameos. And I had been stalking other people's apps before but I kind of forgotten what their character looked like @_@ so it'd be neat if, in the future, reoccurring characters could have their own page (?) not that it's needed but... my goldfish memory... Honestly, I thought finding the heart would come in a bit later so I was surprised when they all met each other so soon LMAO. It's always so funny when everyone is so gung-ho about stuff and Halsey's just like "no pls". The beginning was so W.I.T.C.H-like that I imagined the scenes as if they were in comic panels ahhh @ w @ man this chapter was good! And I don't know why, but them finding the storage just like that makes me think if there wasn't only one other person who could have found the tear in space before them. I'm excited about what will be happening next ^__^
Chapter 12: dude.... wicked. lol
it's a great first start and yeah first chapters are nightmare. XD
anyways... i forgot who said it, but they ended up on the latter of the anime world's part of becoming magical and saving the world. lol
definitely can't wait for their friendship development as well as how they'll be able to get through everything.
good luck with the future chapters!! =]
Chapter 8: ASKDJASLFKJDSFLKDS i can't
all of tHEM!! /scREECHES/
i actually saw this earlier at school but i had stomach cramps and well, school, so i couldn't comment
but omg! it's ma girl! honestly the cast is like A++ esp with the whole ensemble of the apps including the others who will hopefully cameo and the characters honestly i've read every one of them and it made me so much more excited for the story
i still can't believe she's one of the five i was so happy earlier when i was reading this chapter slowly (and with bated breath) but i'm more happy that the story is startiiiiing * U *
btw did u notice all five of them has a nickname/name that rhymes with sea
Chapter 9: wait... what jsut happened? lol
this girl could have been but didn't become.
wondered what happened after tear when the other fated one become it.
anyways, i like your writing style and can't wait to see how this story turns out!
Chapter 8: B Y E LILY IS GOING TO DIE AS THE CENTER
I’m so excited you chose her and the other girls are precious sounding as well!!!!!
I will prepare my sore throat for more screaming bc I know I will be throughout this story
And the stars have answered~
You picked wonderful characters that are really dynamic and so different from each other, ohhhhh how is that going to work out? I wanna know~
Anyways, I'm really excited to see how the story will go and the girls developments. If its not much to ask, did the revap fix the issues that you pointed out; in currently writting both other apps and a story and so I would love for some advice and feedback from you. Only if its not too much
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