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The Tale of the 12 Guardians

Thousands of years ago, a group of 12 boys known as the Guardians once lived in the lands of Fynasia, protecting the peace and prosperity of it. These boys were special for the powers that they harnessed were much stronger than anyone else’s, with the exception of one girl. Along with the twelve boys was a beautiful young girl who was known for her different colored eyes and powers stronger than the guardians.

Fire, earth, water, wind, light, teleportation, flight, telekinesis, frost, healing, thunder, and time control were the powers that they wielded. With their powers, they were worshipped for keeping the people of their lands safe and secure. The girl joined them on their journeys where they would go around to different cities and attend to the people’s needs.

Because of the tremendous amount of love they received, the king of Fynasia grew jealous. The citizens disregarded him, putting their trust solely in the Guardians and the beautiful girl. Wanting to win them back, he told a lie that would cost people their lives. Citizens turned their backs on the Guardians and forced them into exile. The king executed the girl and grew more powerful now that the guardians were out of the day.

Since that day, no one had heard of them. But there was a prophecy where it was said that the reincarnations of the Guardians and the girl would reappear one day and would bring back the peace of Fynasia. Or so that’s what they say…