Just a quick update. I'm gonna talk about my '10th member' fanfic or, to be more specific, a chapter called Magical Likey.

I just watched CARS 3 two days ago. It's a lovely movie. I love it! Pixar nailed it. It made me cry almost every 10-20 minutes :') To be more objective, I try to review the movie by myself and find out what are the reasons that makes me love it! Then I find 3 important points.

1. WELL-TOLD SET-UPS

2. LOVELY CONFLICTS AND CHARACTERS

3. TELLING A STORY BY THE EVENT

My last chapter is lack on the third point. Here is why......

The story is meant to be kinda cheesy. But at some points it feels so weak and dumb. It's because I tell the stories too "obviously". I explain what's happening on the story directly, mostly by narration. For example....

[Dialogues about Haeju talking to the members]

.....I don't care if they can't hear it, I hold their hands one by one and tell them what I feel....... 

......After talking to 8 eight of them, I've realized that confessing my feeling isn't enough. I need to show my love as well. If only I've given one more chance, I promise I will behave.

After Haeju told her feelings to the members by dialogue, a narration appears and tell the freakin' same thing. Haeju's dialogue or the narration alone should be enough to explain the situation but yet I use both of them. It's a repitition and I think it bores the readers. I'm sure when you read it, inside you will say "Yeah, yeah, we get it...." and hurrily want to skip and see what's going to happen next instead.

I don't used to do that while writing stories but my old readers always confused with what I read. Then I learn from the stories in AFF that it's important to make the story clear. But after I while I overdo it. I become so much insecure in making the story understandable. My stories become tasteless and frigid. I used to make things beautifully mysterious. More less like this chapter: Exists Not Because It Makes Sense

To conclude this post, I think I'm gonna learn more about writing and keep trying new things. I start to find new refferences too so I know how I can improve. To be noted, I'm not dissapointed with my last chapter. I still love it (and hopefully so do people). Anyway, let's see what I can do, ok?! ;)