~open workshop (?)~ come criticise my lyrics

Yes, come in yalls

And criticise my lyrics.

 

 

I've been writing lyrics since boy... since even before I started to pick up singing again, and you know what, to tell you truthfully, I'm quite confident with my skill to do it. 

But

I've been watching more kpop english lyrics videos on youtube lately and the comments in it are concerning? Because haven't you ever heard an english lyrics and you go 'hmm that doesn't flow well, that doesn't fit with the beat, that's just awkward, that's just you taking the english translation and cramming it into the instrumental'. You have, right? i believe you have. But I went to all these videos and i've never read people calling out the lyrics maker and be like 'it's cringey'. Well, maybe they don't want to do it in public because that's a very difficult thing to do. 

my experience of going around badly written english lyrics and reading "wow your lyrics is good" just made me question my and other people's taste so...

this is your chance to call me out. I just want to know what the masses think of my lyrics, TRUTHFULLY. I don't want to hear "oh it's perfectly good", nothing is ever "perfectly good" so come and give them criticism :)))

Be as harsh as you want, i can take it ;D

 

(as you can see there are a lot of old covers in the playlist so don't be shocked if you hear some e high notes in it /i'm talking spica's you don't love me that cover is tragic/. just be careful!)

 

 

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annabloem
#1
I'm going to be nitpicky so sorry in advance.

You don't love me

never trust you from the start - grammatically should be trusted
I cared for you deeply - doesn't flow that well
Clearly what was I thinking? - just feels weird as an English sentence to me?
I wish it left me with some sorrow - also feels weird as a sentence to me. You wished it had brought you sadness?
You know nothing of me - doesn't flow that well
All those lies you were so full, what you think that I'm a tool - I absolutely love this line. I was just going to point out the points that I thought could be improved, but omg this line is so good <3

My old story

flowers blowing in the river - makes no sense at first English wise. like, I get what you're trying to see, the wind blows them into the river, but falling would be better since flowers is the subject
did you see right through me - doesn't flow that well
I'd always think of you - also doesn't flow that well

all in all I feel like this is a big improvement over you don't love me.

If you want, I'll go through your other lyrics as well later ^^; I'm not sure if it's helpful in anyway, but I tried xD
DREAM-ENTERTAINMENT
#2
i always loved your english and duet covers!! <3
made me remember my english covers back in 2011 *cringe* T-T
Blu3Wind
#3
I COMPLETELY AGREEEE!!!
Omg sometimes the lyrics are so weird and doesnt match at all, but they still grt popular... and i'm like what???

But in ur case i cam 100% say they're perfectly flawless. Meaning wise, tempo wise, everything is perfect. I even played ur Rain cover in my office out loud for everyone to hear. Lolololllll so u're good... it's just that maybe other ppl's standards are too simple? So they are easily satisfied? Lolll