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Only Memories

TItle: 3/5

THe title was not very captivating. Only memories sound vague. It could be either a love story, tragedy, etc. Only memories can work for most kind of stories, and mostly indicate tragedy. There was barely any relations from the title to story as I can see.

Forward/ Description : 7/10

The forward has grammatical errors. For someone to be hooked into the story, it mostly depends on the forward. If you have errors in the forward, readers will expect errors throughout the story also. Also, the forward sentences don't go along with each other, each standing for a different meaning. 

It's all based on luck and how they deal with it.

There aren't always happy ending in someone's life, right?

These two sentences have no relations, also there are diffficulties with the grammar. 

There aren't always happy endings in a person's life, right?   would have sounded much better.  

 

Plot: 15/25

Somehow, the plot was a little unrealistic. If Tao and Kris have loved each other, or something in that sense, Tao would not have bashed him when Kris left because he was hurting in Exo, then eventually regret it. There is not really a distinct plot, just little sad drabbles about each of the member's loneliness (besides Kai and Baekhyun) made into one story. The events was basically copy, pasting, and tweaking, making it from angst to predictable events. There was no of any sort, making this story a little plain. The plot idea is great. Usually, I dislike short story with no details, same goes with this story's amount of words. There are little plot holes, as as what Tao said about Kris. People who does not know about what Tao said about the departure of Kris might be confused so you should add on to that. You also should say how Kai's relationship with Kyungsoo changed, and Baekhyun's current relationship with Chanyeol or past. The short amount of words make the story seems empty.

 

Character Description: 7/25
 
The way you describe the charcters were very vague. Many of the different members have same personalities -Chanyeol and Kyungsoo. I feel like you wrote this on the top of your head, not really elabrorating the ideas. Instead of each person having each of their own unique personality, most of them share a nature -Chanyeol, Kyungsoo, Sehun. The only feeling these characters have is sadness. There are no variety of booming personalities. Yes, this is a short oneshot with only 1,500 words, but I feel like if you made it a little bit longer it would have been 2x better. I have little sympathy for the couples after a while, most of their stories are similar. There were little thoughts of the other person's side. Kyungsoo's side was heard, but I barely understand Kai.
 
Writing Style: 7/15
Your writing style is easy to understand, meaning I can easily play those scenes in my head. Although, your word choices could have been better. I appreciate the sense of mystery you have in your writing, but there were too little details about the surrounding sceneries. Also, there are little dialogues throughout (besides the ending), which makes it harder to enjoy.
 
Grammar And Spelling: 9/10
You have little grammatical and spelling errors during the story. If I were to be picky and stick at every details, there are some that aren't hard to miss. After a comma, you would need to add a space before the next word. The same things apply with a period. Some sentences were wrong, for example "Tao wanted Kris back. But, did Kris want the same?" The second phase should have been combined with the first, for it's a fragment.
 
Writing Flow: 2/5
There is really no flow to this story. It's one type of event by 12 different people. In some aspects, it was too face paced. Each couple has gona by VERY quickly, making flow and charcter's description drop.
 
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
This story is very nice to read when you want EXO angst. Although, this isn't the kind to get greatly known. It's sort of cliche at some points where it gets boring. Something you should have thoughts on is taking one of the pairs, and creating a full out fic or oneshot.  
 
 
Notes: Sorry if the writing style wasn't as long as you intended it to be. It was like finding a flow in a calm river.
 
 
SCORE: 54/100
 
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