Hello everyone. :)

So I just recently had my first review of my story done and I really wanted to share it with you. I am quite surprised at the wonderful review that NadahishamazzamXO left for me. The people at Bacon Yehet Shop were very understanding, and even though there was a problem, they worked hard to make it up to me and I definitely recommend them for reviews, and even the other services they offer. 

Title: 10/10
"The Keeper's Destiny" sounds really cool, and gives the story a suspenseful theme, like the sensation I get whenever I open up a "Lord of the Rings" book. 
 

Description/Foreword: 8/10
Thankfully, your description actually describes the story. Most of the time when I look at the descriptions of other stories, they don't really tell much about what's going on and who's who, but thank you for informing your readers about what you should be prepared for in the story.

I love how you explain even more about the OC in the foreword! I really makes me feel more knowledgeful when reading the first few chapters. I also enjoy how you had the MAMA narration, but I kind of wished that you kept on going with it.
Character Development/Showcasing: 10/10
It may seems weird, but this is actually the first time I see a story as developed as this, the characters go amazing with the flow of the story, I like how you made Kai, and the relationship of him with the OC, the personalities were soon starting to show. Its so cool! 

Appearance: 4/5
I like how you have a new image for every chapter, it makes the story more cool in my opinion. But a poster will make it way more cooler and popular. You didn't choose a chapter layout, but the font and size is easy to read. However, I think it will be bettter if you wrote in paragaphs, even if short ones, instead of writing in lines. oh, and by the way, the first chapter is typed twice, if you didnt realize.

Originality/Plot: 24/25

I think its unique! like, I think most of the EXO-L writers here saw the mvs of exo and they know their power, but I never read a story about it (in fact, when I knew I had to review the story, I kind of hesitated.) However, I am SERIOUSLY AMUSED! And as I told you, the Egyptian myth is a big bonus for me! It's so interesting and I really really really really look forward to the next chapters, This plot really takes the reader to the edge!

Flow: 9/10
I think it's great, maybe too slow, but enjoyable! Maybe you should decrease the description and add more scenes. other than this, your flow was perfectly great for the plot!

Grammar/Spelling: 23/25
Its pretty good! but there are some mistakes, like wander (instead of wonder), think (instead of thinking) and few more, however its easily understandable!

General Enjoyment/Last Comment: 5/5

Okay, this pretty great! It's slowly rising to my favourites list. I am supposed to just scan read the first 5 chapters and skim read the others. But honestly, I scanned them all! It is just so beautiful! I hope you write more from this, cuz it gives me an impatient feeling. I am actually a fan now of youur story and I am asking you here infront of everbody, update soon! please xD

Again, thank you so much to the reviewer and thank you to the shop for great services. :)

-Priscila