First, thank you for the update (and the Twitter mention, haha)!
Overall, a /lovely/ chapter - good in-depth look at the characters' thoughts and emotions.
-This sounds mean (and it's not meant to be, I promise), but I love the conflict/dilemma that Eric is facing - it gives his character a more "realistic" feel and I like that he's already questioning the morality of the situation, esp. since Aerisia has been nothing but kind and generous towards him. That scene between him and Lina was absolutely heart-wrenching ;A; (yet brilliantly written, so props!) This also makes me wonder whether or not the other rogues will also feel conflicted (I already have a feeling Yunho will, hehehe... XD)
-Ugh, that scene between Kahi and Yoochun... T_T In a way, I can understand Yoochun's reasoning, but that doesn't make it any less painful. I feel so bad for both of them, and Liyin too. Love is a fickle thing, no? Again, another brilliant scene (Y).
I did spot a few errors, but I think the only major thing was Eric's train of thought (in italics)... The last sentence didn't need to be italicized, since you're switching back to the "present." Not going to be too nit-picky on the tense errors, since you mentioned before that you often have trouble with that, and I'm so glad seeing an update that I could care less, lol. (That is, unless you /want/ to know...?)
But yeah. Thanks for the update; can't wait for the next chapter! ^^
I love love love all the scenes from Calor! Especially the conversations between Kyuhyun and Changmin because it's really like them to talk like that xD
I'm glad you updated! Looking forward to the next!
Chapter 8: So.... When is the next update? I wanna read more about YunBoA! Awww... those little moments really get me. And it's cute how that perhaps Sooyoung was a little bit jealous of this Sooyoung while Yunho was narrating the story. HAHA! Don't worry BoA! She's just a sister to him!
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