The Birthday Boy, Lee Taemin Review
Story Title: The Birthday Boy, Lee Taemin
Genre(s): Romance, Happiness
Brief Description: The birthday boy, Lee Taemin got surprise party by his fellow members and Lee Eun Mi.
Rated H: No
Reviewed By: angelfocusbroken (Lady Comma)
1. Title: [4/5 pts.]
The title is cute, kind of reflects the charm of the story. I docked off a point because it does have a hint of cheesiness, sorry sweetie.
2. Poster/Graphics/Background: [5/5 pts.]
The poster is cute; it goes along with the story. Even though you didn’t use any sort of color scheme, or graphics, it is simple and not overbearing. Also, I love the pictures you chose for the characters. I think SHINee is hot and so uber sexy!!! ^^
3. Foreword/Description: [10/10 pts.]
Since I don’t expect a long synopsis of a story when it’s a one-shot, I think your description and foreword is perfect. You break down each character, and you describe the plot in a simple sentence. You give potential readers a glimpse of the story, but don’t spoil the ending for them. Good job!
4. Plot: [15/30 pts]
The plot was a bit erratic and didn’t make a whole lot of sense. You rushed through the scenes, and some of it didn’t make any sense due to English not being your native language. I only docked half so I wouldn’t be so harsh but understanding. It was, however, quite cute and romantic. Just work on your organization and your grammar, spelling, and punctuation and you will have a cute story!
5. Flow: [2.5/5 pts.]
Like I’ve said, the organization and scenes were erratic and flew by. I was having a hard time catching up with what was going on. I only docked off half since it was cute.
6. Characterization: [5/5 pts.]
The good thing is, your characters stayed in character. I saw SHINee’s version of Hello Baby (which I LOVED!) and saw that you portrayed each member just right! They act the way you described them in real life.
7. Grammar/Spelling: [15/20 pts.]
Since you have already warned me that English is not your first language, I’m only going to dock you 5 points because I don’t want to be unfair or unkind. You really should work on your grammar, spelling, and punctuation so in your future fanfics, your readers will be able to understand them better, as well as enjoy them more. I’m in the process of writing a guide on how to write fanfics and I will be including some tips for grammar, punctuation, spelling, and organization. Check it out when I publish it!
8. Overall Enjoyment/Entertainment: [10/20 pts.]
Your story is quite cute. I did enjoy reading it because of the characters involved, but I did get frustrated trying to understand what was going on at times, which is why I docked off half of your points, sorry kiddo.
Comments/Feedback: I know that my review is probably really harsh, and I don’t want to come off as unkind since I know you aren’t good at English. I tried my best to be understanding, but honest as well. I hope I haven’t hurt your feelings with my review. Like I’ve previously stated, I am planning on writing (and currently writing) a guide to writing fanfics and it will include various topics. I hope you check it out once I have published i. On the flipside, I would like to let you know that if you make any changes, or write another fanfic, and would like to better your score, you are more than welcome to request another review. I hope I’ve helped!
*Please always remember that if you make changes, or add to your story, you can always request for another review to better your score. Just send in another application, and we’ll get back with you as soon as possible.*
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