Dream Inside A Dream

Description

I sat there watching the horror unfolding in front of me on the streets in Seoul. I held the child to me praying I could find his parents in all this craziness going on. He cried into me but think god I knew him and he trusted me. The explosion had been loud and people were hurt. When I saw it happening He was at the edge of the sidewalk, when The Two buildings arcoss the street exploded and the cars started crashing.

 

Sometimes things arent what they seem to be. Sometimes its just a Dream. Maybe even a nightmare.

Foreword

Just a Warning! My Grammer and so does My spelling so please forgive me for this. I do try my best to double and Triple check my work but I dont catch everything so please dont bash me for this. Not everyone and there writing is prefect.

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AkiraRosenthal #1
Chapter 19: I know this was your first fanfiction, but I am going to be critical about this, so don't take this the wrong way. Just trying to give out my thoughts.
First, paragraphs would be quite nice. It was a strain to the eyes to read something without paragraphs, believe or not paragraphs would make the story a whole easier and better to read.
Second, to be honest the story was really confusing, all over the place. First there was this catastrophe? then Sky liking Sehun, Luhan " Sehun's c***" then it was an art camp and some camp stories. And suddenly, it turns out that Sky like Chanyeol. So basically, what does that catastrophe in the beginning have to do with anything?

I'm sorry that this may come off as rude, but the "Forwards" in all of your stories actually seem interesting and worth reading. However, if your stories end up something like this then I am afraid that you will have lost this reader.
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