Chapter 1: Fascinating. And an interesting take on the prompt. I don't know that the description quite does it justice since 'trainer' did not make me think anything to do with Ender's Game, but it does make sense when you get further into it. You certainly set them up with an interesting relationship as well, and I liked how it unfolded. There was no sudden, blinding attraction, but rather a shared journey of growth and discovery between both of them. It was interesting watching them develop into their respective roles and to see how their relationship changed over time. I thought it was also ridiculously touching with the way they mutually (if somewhat silently) yearned for company/contact from the other as well. And then that whole part in the middle where, like the commenter below me mentioned, they were both acting quite frustrating. haha It was interesting to see the way they eventually played the exact same scene over but with role reversals in the end. I also kept waiting for the title to come in and I wasn't disappointed at the very end there. That was a nice touch, I will say.
The only thing I noticed were some typos here and there, but overall, the reading was pretty smooth with nice descriptions and the font was pleasantly larger than normal. I'm good with that (smaller tends to kill my eyes haha). Well done with the story, prompt, and pairing, and I good luck with any endeavors in the future.
Chapter 1: OMGGGGGGGGGG
THISBIS WAS LOVELYYYYYYY!!
EXTREMELY FRUSTRATING IN THE MIDDKE THERE.
At home point I was shaking my phone because u was so frustrated with woo LOL
But waaah~~
I dunno, I really really reaaaally liked this :D
Chapter 1: The brilliant thing about this one shot is that you don't have to know the source material to understand just what pressures these two are feeling and the oppression they struggle under. That they found each other is the real miracle. Great job.
Chapter 1: I knew it!! 'twas your story!
You just gave me back my wooho feels thank u Eni ㅡ3ㅡ♡ I was hoping there's gonna be more of Wy/Jh pairing for the 2nd challenge but at least yours is there :D
and I love how u potray both characters ♡ woo hesitancy, and juno persistent of what he believes.. I love their chemistry like that.
I really loved this as you say short and sweet and I really wanted to cry when Junho left. But was so very happy with the ending! ^^ See Now I can comment lol I just couldn't find the right words. You helped me just now. Short and sweet indeed.
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