Chanyeol Was Here

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Chanyeol disappeared from Mei's life and she isn't sure why nor if she even wants him back. Events occur and she has to make some changes in order for her life to be normal... normal-ish that is. Sasaengs are the biggest enemy against their hope for a relationship. Is love truly the strongest power? Or is fear...

 

 

 

 

Foreword

"Chanyeol, why are you here?" I leaned my head back to see his face.

"I needed to see you again, to apologize. I don't want you to be saddened by me... and I want to fix things." As I listened to the sound of his voice, something clicked inside me.

"Oppa, go home. Go to dance practice, eat properly, sleep well, and get married to Dara. You need to move along in your life. You need to move along happily." 

"What?! Are you already giving up? So soon?!" My eyes met with his and I forced myself to keep a firm expression and not look away.

"It's not giving up. It's just moving on. We never had to try to see if it would work because I know it wouldn't. Please move on too and be happy." There was a barbie smile on my face, one of the fakest I know.

"I- what is it that you are saying about Dara? I don't like her!" 

"Chanyeol... I know you secretly like her and I want you to get something special like her." There wasn't any more that I could take without crying, so I slipped out of his arms and walk away as he called desperately after me. I didn't dare turn around;  if I had, he would have seen that I didn't mean the things I said. If he knew that, he would never move on.

 

 

 

 

 

Your name is Mei but when I write Mei, you could enter your name

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EriTay #1
this sounds like awesomeness
ElisBaek #2
I like the story ^^ goodluck with this!!!
Shirotakashi #3
Chapter 5: Who are those girls? Saesang? And why is he saying that?? I really want to know!
Thanks for the update, author!
peanutoast #4
Chapter 1: I love your story already, and the characters are so loveable! <3
WoodWitchofSuburbia #5
Chapter 1: I'm wondering if you're going for a more poetic type of writing style? I'm not entirely sure why you're making new paragraphs for every new sentence. It could work, especially if you're going for a more poetic feel. I just want to know if this is artistic license or...?

Also, maybe you should try describing things a little bit differently? Right now, you kind of have a: He did this. And then he did this. And then he did that. kind of thing going on, and it does little to create vivid imagery. Build a vision for your readers! It will make them connect with the characters and what's going on much better ~ <3

Keep on writing. It looks like you have some fans!
ljexolove #6
Chapter 3: I like this fanfic! Please update soon!
mialafreve #7
Chapter 1: Chapter 1: I like the way you describe her feelings. They remind me of Bella when Edward left her. And also like the attitude of the girl. The thing that I don't like though it's the structure of the chapter. It look like the structure of a song and not of a chapter. Did you choose it on purpose like that or..? If yes, it's okay, but if no, then you better check some books and copy the structure of the chapters. As for the enjoyment, I liked it so far. in term of point I give 7.5/10. For the rest, your style it's okay so don't change it. It's a great story so advertise it a lot to have much more views and readers. That's it. Hope my review helped you :)
Min-Yung #8
Chapter 1: It's a good first chapter, makes me curious about quite a few things. But could you give the characters names? It feels weird just say reading 'her' when you're talking about the girl's friend. And give the main character herself a name. Leaving a gap for her name also feels weird since I always forget to make a name, and it kinda ruins the read.
Also, avoid using 'I' too much. You have that a lot in your writing. Try using different sentence starters. Another thing, you switch from present tense to past tense. See if you can stick with only one. I'm sorry, I feel like a reviewer here. But it seems like a nice story idea :D
seoriNbarolovers #9
Chapter 1: Hi there! You should update soon, I wanna know what happen next?
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