What will happen when one day Hoya meets a very special girl who is the adopted daughter of Special Agent Gibbs of NCIS? What will happen when they both have secrets that could destroy or bring them even closer together?
 

 

 

 

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Title (4/5)

The title is good. It gives off an interesting vibe. I liked it. It was simple. However, there are a few chapters so I can’t link the title to the story yet. It’s really unique. You did a good job. (Infinite H ! :DD)

Forward/Description (6/10)

Description

 Characters and their names. It was really simple. Not a bad thing, though. I would have liked it more if you were a little bit more detailed. But anyways, it was okay. (NCIS <33)

Forward

The forward was good. It was not too long and not too short either. It gives the reader a curious feeling. It got me all hyped up.

Graphics (Bonus) (4/5)

The graphics were an individual. What made it more interesting is that you actually used your face in it. I mean, what’s not unique about that? However, I feel that Gibbs should have not been included but then that’s my opinion. The graphics were good, in my opinion. Good choice!  

Characterization (17/20)

I can’t really say anything about the characters because there’s only one chapter. However, I can tell the relationship between the team is good. You drop little hints here and there allowing the readers to guess their relationship.

I hope your characters will grow more in the future.

Plot (18/20)

The plot’s good. It’s interesting and special. (See what I did there?) I really have nothing to say about the plot. I feel like it’s okay the way it is now. I hope you can develop to the point where it exceeds perfect. :))

Flow (17/20)

I, once again, can’t say anything about the flow for now. However, the flow for Chapter was in the normal range.  Not too fast or too slow. It was flowing perfectly fine. The future flow of the story entirely depends on you. Good Luck!

Grammar (8/10)

Not to offend you or anything but I’ll fix the whole chapter. (You had only a few mistakes though) Plus, I think you could’ve have started it more… interestingly? Just my thought.

Overall (7/10)

Overall, it was enjoyable. I was satisfied. This is a good story. It just needs a few fixing here and there. Good Luck! Stay Awesome!

Bonus (4 /5)

CHAPTER ONE WAS GODDAMN TOO SHORT. I NEED MORE. The story was really interesting and I’m willing to read it in the future. Stay Awesome! :))

(Sorry if I was harsh, I can’t help it. :( I wonder why you picked the iest reviewier though. xD) 

                    Total (85 /100) B

 

Reviewed by: Rose Review Shop