F.T. Island Dorm Life

Description

Minhwan got kicked out of his house and he bumps into a handsome stranger on the streets...

Foreword

-Minhwan's POV-

It was a cold and stormy day, I was walking along the quiet streets.. I got kicked out of my house because I had been bad.. I was walking aimlessly when I bumped into someone...

"ahh ! Sorry !!! I wasn't watching my way!"

"Yah, it's ok.."

I looked up. This young man with handsome eyes said it was ok? When I dirtied his expensive jacket?

"Yah, but your jacket.. It looks expensive.."

"Nevermind, it's ok.~ ^^"

"Oh, ok.."

"Hey, why are you out here soaking wet? Where do you live?"

"I got kicked out...." I said it very shyly >//<

"Oh, in that case, do you wanna follow me back to my dorm with my hyungs? We are all really nice people ^^"

"Omo?! Jinjja?! Gumawo ajusshi san!!"

"Yahh,, keke cute~ but I'm not that old~! I'm born in 1992"

"Eh? Me too"

"Means we're same age?"

"Yupp, I'm Seunghyun. What's your name?"

"Minhwan. Choi Minhwan."

 

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choijonghyunsaranghe #1
Chapter 16: I cried T_T
DKimLittleGoddess #2
Uhhh... I don't get it. -.-; You're what seems to be 'plot' and the whole story is completely different. There's a lot to point out but I'm gonna comment what I remembered.

You're writing style is kinda... off. There was a lot of unnecessary smileys everywhere and too much use of 'kekekeke'. If your characters are happy, you can always express it in other ways like, 'He chuckled, "Blah Blah Blah." Then smiled.' instead of using that laugh too often.

And the story was too fast paced. The days were continuous and a lot happened like they did this and that and immediately saw Wonbin, etc. Wonbin's last five minutes was wayyy too fast. You didn't even wrote what happened during the analysis and just injected him with a 'killing medicine' whtver that's called. ~.~;

And as I've said, the plot and the whole story is different. It ended with Wonbin dying? I thought I'm reading about F.T Island's Dorm Life focused on SeungHwan. I was expecting that they do things like this and that with Minhwan but then it shifted and focused on Jaejin and Wonbin's story. -.-; And whatever happened to SeungHwan after they discovered they were childhood friends? -.-;

And how can Minhwan magically knew that Wonbin is sick? O.O; He inherited this from his mother... Okay. But he immediately knew it was stomach cancer? Whoa... *O* But this is a 'fic' anyways, so it's acceptable in a way.

Sorry if I sounded harsh. I'm not being mean or anything... ^^v You can improve, definitely! :)

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YourRemedy #3
Waeyo!? Why did you kill wonbin? Why? T-T<br />
anyways, I love it!<br />
paranoidfreaker #4
Oh my~~ Wonbin you're sick?????<br />
TT^TT
paranoidfreaker #5
new reader here!! wah~~ i think i love your story.. just update soon.. and i hope wonbin don't do anything that will hurt jaejin..<br />
^^
asdfghjBullySong #6
cliffhanger .. i hope wonbin will not do anything to our jaejin :))
SHINee2MinLove #7
@kihyunkit; haha! :D ne, thank you very very much!! :D
asdfghjBullySong #8
eheheh i love your pairings and the story :D so cool :D update soon :D
SHINee2MinLove #9
@kihyunkit; haha((: ne, i will update asap. :D gumawo for reading!!!^^<br />
@FT123456; hehe, thanks for reading too. ;}
FT123456 #10
Aww.. Jinnie gonna be sad ><
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