Chapter 3: Hmm...I bet Suho bond with her so that's why he doesn't let her go or there's something about her that make Suho want the girl to stay - Yuki
Chapter 1: This looks interesting ^^ although it looks a bit rushed and everything goes so fast, and I think I know what is going to happen but the idea of 12 handsome guys in one house is really nice ;)
Chapter 1: The idea is good, 12 handsome vampires are hot and very interesting, although its still kinda messy. Just in one paragraph you have different pov. I know nobody's perfect, but I just wanna share what I thought. Actually Im not a writer, so sorry if my thought is not relevan.
Hope you can make great story, authornim, fighting!! ^^
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