Chapter 1: Scratch the comment about undefined relationship. I just reread the beginning again, though I'm going to say that they've probably moved into dating territory now after this little meeting. lol
Chapter 1: This was certainly an interesting series of events. lol You manage to maintain a good sense of forbidden, or at least dangerous given the situation, desire throughout and it exists right up until they finish. heh I almost applauded Xiumin's being the bigger man until that crumbled so very easily. Disappointing in a way but far more expected. haha
And I appreciate how you described Tao's efforts on Xiumin as well, though he certainly picked an odd/risky place to give a first go at it. His exclamation after was completely hilarious and not at all what I was anticipating. O.o Bahaha! It took me a second to understand the "jelly in Xiumin's hands" but upon reading further it made sense just fine. I'm more used to the figurative putty saying. *face palm*
I will say this was another one where it was hard to initially define their relationship status until the end since there are no words you use to indicate their closeness and the "reading signals" correctly part only meant that they had a mutual attraction. It all makes sense by the end though and Chanyeol's comment is certainly one worth laughing at too. I think you chose an interesting ending line and I'm not sure it works as well with the otherwise comedic overtones you were supplying throughout.
Good job overall though. It flows well and comes together nicely by the end.
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