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''What love is by Exotic-T'


Reviewer: StarlightAegyo
Mark :39/45 or 89%

 

Title: 3/5
Hmmm... To me, even though you told the meaning of love... I can't even relate it to Kris  being the father of Tao... Although, I do get what the point is.


Des+foreword: 8/10
The desc. and foreword are well written.

Characters: 5/5
The characters were written appropriately. I like the way you made them look mysterious. And it made me shocked to read that Kris was the Father~! XD

Grammar: 10/10
It was well written indeed. No need to point out wrong grammar cause there isn't any~ XD


Plot: 9/10
I really love the way you wrote that. And I didn't expect that he'll be pregnant~! All in all, it was good.

Flow: 4/5
The flow of the story was great~! Even though its just a one-shot, I really appreciated your story THAT much! I usually just read through a drabble, but this one made me confused and feel the mystery betwwen them~ Tao was really expressive in this story~ That's good! XD


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First of all, I loved the story~ And Second of all, I was not supposed to review this,                 but the reviewer you chose was busy~ So... yeah~ I loved the one-shot~! XD

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Reviewer: junior_ace
Mark : 29/50 or 79%

Title: 3/5
ok, i'm a bit excited when i read the title, but when i read all the story, i fount out that the title didn't suit much. here's my tip: first, figure out the characters. second, figure out how the storyline gonna be, then, just find the perfect title for your story^^


Des+foreword: 6/10
okay, i think there's aren't any problem with this, but pretty please can you give the description of the story??


Characters: 3/5
this story is about kris and tao, right?? why kris' role didn't came out?? the other reader will also think the same as me :)


Grammar: 7/10
is it really that english is not your first language?? your grammar is really good enough... but remember, all the actions are in past tense and if you put the word 'always' to your actions, please make it present tense. and what tao was murmuring, should bein present, okie??


Plot: 5/10
i love your plot but it seems like there's something missing in the story. please describe the action/things with detailed.


Flow: 3/5
okie, the thing is, you didn't detailed it. it was too fast for what i think it is.


Bonus (based on font,posters/background) : 2/5
i think you should change the font to something else like georgia or something else

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Average Mark: 84/100 or 84%
Keep up the good work !

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AmieDMJ
#1
Chapter 46: bye bye~ I love this shop so much /cries a Han river
Cinnimoroll08
#2
Chapter 46: farewell TT^TT
(im kinda interested but idk xD)
DobuOnew
#3
Can we be affiliates?

Somnium Review Shop
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/549557/somnium-review-shop-open-dreams-request-review-shop-reviews

I would be glad if you accepted. :)
-farewell
#4
Affies? :D
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/428546/
MindragonFan #5
Chapter 44: Holy sheit, the x-men trailer is amazing!! Teach me your ways, sensei. *bows to your awesomeness*
fluffpenguin
#6
Chapter 3: When will you be open again?
fluffpenguin
#7
Chapter 3: Is my dp that I requested last time included as one time that I requested?
buttsmex
#8
Chapter 42: Reviewer 1: Well.. i meant that love isnt easy. especially if it was ur own dad. and to make it all for worse, he died. and ur pregnant when ur suppose to. sorry if i was not being expressive lol. ^^' Thank you. Haha thanks. I was wondering about that. XD Really? Its my third story.. so.. kinda nervous if i still make mistakes. :3 well.. i dont exactly love m-preg.. but yeah. lol Thanks you. :) Its ok. Thanks for the time. <3

Reviewer 2: I know. I'm sorry.. ;_; lol jk. I did the title first then the story. I guess it was a mistake lol. I dunno what to put.. T^T my wrong. i should've put kris as a slight appearance. Yeah. I'm from malaysia. But i'm always on top in my class when it comes to english though. ^^ And okie. Hmm.. ok. Thanks. I was thinking that. But dang, i use it to much. Thanks for the time~ <3
--vikseu
#9
Chapter 39: Whoops~ i think you forgot something. can i ask for a redo?