P5 | Our Fated Meeting by Kim Yunaa
↺ The Clique Graphic Shop | CLOSED FOREVER | Thank you everyone.reviewer: StarlightAegyo & eagle_tamer date released: 18/4/2013
Reviewer : eagle_tamer
Score : 33/50
Title; 3/5
It sounds very common, I think it should be at least unique. :3
Description&Foreword; 6/10
It seems fine, though using the foreword as the author's message? I think that should be done after the story sneak peak.
Characters; 3/5
Naming, the characters were pretty fine.
Grammar; 8/10
You shouldn't put spaces before and after the sentence if you're using a punctuation mark,
there were a lot of mistakes, but I'll be going easy on you.
Plot; 5/10
Everything seemed out of place, the thing is, your plot is too regular.
Flow; 3/5
Everything happened too fast, it's just too overused. The way your flow is, it's too overused.
Bonus(based on font,posters/background); 5/5
It's nice, I like the background, poster, and fonts. :)
R/N: I'm sorry if I'm being harsh, do forgive. :3
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Reviewer : StarlightAegyo
Score : 40.5/50
Title: 4.5/5
I think that the title fitted well with the storyline. But, please change the Overall title to 'Our Unique meeting'
If that is what is said in the poster. Or else you'll confuse people.
Description&Foreword: 9/10
The description and foreword suited it well, So, I gave you a 9. I didn't give you the other point cause
I think it should be right that you put a disclaimer for the things that you put in your story.
Characters: 5/5
The characters fitted their role in the story. And nothing much to say about it. :))
Grammar: 7/10
I gave you a 7 cause you had a bit of mistakes using your tenses properly.
Plot: 8/10
Plot was great. But, I've read a lot of stories that are similar to this. And please do not feel bad that I said that
cause fanfics are just our escape from reality and I hope you'll understand.
Flow: 4/5
The flow of the story was nice. It did confuse me abit on how fast some of the parts are.
Bonus (based on font,posters/background) : 3/5
The poster and the backgroundfitted the story well. But I think in writing the fonts,
you should only italicize the words that depict speech of the character to make it clear.
I hope you take in my advice and continue the sequel to your story. Everyone would love it~ :''))
Average score : 36.75 / 50
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