Review

It's Just For Show

Hello! I know it's been a while and you guys are all having fun reading the sequel drabble but for those interested, I finally got a review for my story :D Yay! Feel free to read and whatnot :) 


     It's Just For Show - infinite myungsoo romance scandal - main story image

It's Just For Show -- momodays09

Title 9/10

It wasn't boring, but it could fend readers off as they could understand that in a show the idol got together with someone but in the end the feelings were never real. Also, I liked how you ended it with they do have feelings for each other, and it wasn't all just for show, as the title suggests. I really likes that twist :)

Foreword and Description 4/5

It's not bad, not that drawing either. It's a fairly well desciption, when you use your opinion rather than those "Yah~ You come back here!" and Woohyun ran away" kind of stuff, which makes me want to slam my face into the wall.

Characterization 8/10

I like the characterization! I liked Seohyun's bubbly personality, and for once L is not a cold jerk! YAY!

Grammar and Vocab 35/50

You've got perfect grammar, nothing special as you're from Calfornia XD You could use more vocabs though, to really bring out the scene to the readers. For example, you could say a little bit more about the streams. Were they slow and peaceful? Or really fast? And the waterfall could definitely use more desccribing. You could use words such as "Cascading", "Seohyun was shocked. Heck, it felt like she was in paradise. And with Myungsoo next to her..."  

Plot 35/35

LIKE OMFG. I loved it. Normally these fics would end with the idol saying stone faced, "Good. The show is over," and "insert insult here", and leaving the girl crying. But instead, you used the stubborness they had and twisted the whole thing. Oh god, I just love this.

Overall 91/100

I really liked this fic. Keep it up!

Reviewed by kpopandvarietylover from ♔EGO, Cupcakes and KPOP Shoppe♔

Like this story? Give it an Upvote!
Thank you!
momodays09
It's Just for Show: Aha, I'm so late on updating on these story feeds. Thank you so much for all your support! Sequel is up so please check it out ^^

Comments

You must be logged in to comment
rOsEjOOng
#1
Chapter 16: nice and sweet story author nim..:-)
pilsuk123
#2
Chapter 10: I really love how the nick names they have each other... It felt real~~
Myunsoo_iheartyou #3
Chapter 8: Omg!! Dis story is awesome I love it!!!
cloudymogg #4
Chapter 17: Aigooo i love this fic soooooo much^^
ShinLTaec #5
Chapter 16: Omg... I love the ending soo much! you are seriously so awesome. Only if that could be his real number. i dont case how much my phone bill is going to be, at least i get to hear his voice. but that was smart though using how you spell infinite for the number. :D
HyunJane #6
Chapter 15: omo!!!!!!!!!!!!
wahhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!
i hope you will make a squeal! excited for that!!!!!!!!!!!!
xoxokai9
#7
Chapter 12: AWMYGAWD
READING THIS FROM L'S SIGHT OF VIEW IS JUST ADJHFUYGCUYDFDF
NICE CHAPTER ANW AUTHORNIM XD
BTW, OFC YOU GOT TO MAKE DRABBLE FOR THE SEQUEL OF THIS STORY ><
sabrinawu
#8
Chapter 11: OMG I HAVE THAT SHIRT!