유리(Yuri) Glass by aiyumestranger

Title (3/5)

I think "Glass" would be the perfect title instead of adding the korean characters and the pronunciation for "유리." That's the only problem I have with the title. Other than that, I like how simple and short the title is.

Appearance (5/5)

I really love the poster! It's very lovely, and it reflects on what your story is about.

Description/Foreword (13/15)

There were a few grammatical mistakes in your description that can easily be accepted and passed on.  I felt that you didn't need to add Changmin's part in the description. I think it would've been perfect and less revealing if you didn't add Changmin's situation in love, and rather described it or presented it in your story. 

Your foreword is perfect! Maybe it reveals a bit too much of the story, but it's enough for the readers to taste your writing and know how your writing style is.

Plot (20/25)

In ways, the plot is similar to others that I have read in other stories on AFF. For an example, the girl (Yoona) wants to forget her first love by doing something she either loves or is dedicated to (in your case, it's writing for an article), but ends up falling in love for a different man (Changmin) who seems to understand her or who seems to get along with her. However, I can see how you have in cooperated this common idea into something interesting and different. I can definitely see that you have added some twist and touches in your writing to make it different from others.

Characters (10/15)

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