Jang Wooyoung, IU
What happens if you like the person, a player, you gave him love letter and he rejected you? You decided to forget about him.. What happens if... you were dating with him and you found him actually not loving you? What will happen?
My first time writing fanfic here. I don't know good or not, so please leave a comment! ^^ Thankyou. (: I would be writing more on the Milky Couple (Wooyoung and IU) but I'll also write about the TaecYoon Couple (Taecyeon and Yoona). Some characters not mention will also appear in the story. :D
The title is ok, but you should avoid titles with punctuation marks. This title makes me think of a comedy fanfic, so when the story gets emotional at the last few chapters, it didn't suit the title.
The description gives away too much information about the story. The answers to the questions are too obvious. Its alright to have questions in the description or foreword to make it interesting, but don't give obvious ones.
You didn't post a foreword, so I've got nothing to say.
The characters would be what I call, vividly drawn. Their personalities are being drawn as a chapter is updated. Good work!
At the start, your plot was quite similar to other stories I read before. But towards the end, it got really exciting. I liked the way an something happens and then trouble comes just when everything is alright. That makes the story very exciting.
You had some problems phrasing a sentence. For example: I was so envious those people in Top 3
It should be: I was so envious of those people in Top 3
Of course, there are more but I won't say it here. Your grammar is ok, but there are a few mistakes.
The flow wasn't that good, I was surprised that Wooyoung and IU liked each so fast! Their feelings about each other should come slowly. Towards the end, the flow was better.
My enjoyment: 9/10
I enjoyed this fanfic. It made me want to keep going. There are just enough chapters for a good fanfic. Although I'm not a fan of Wooyoung and IU, I must say, this storyline is good.
Didn't really done well, so I shall work even harder and give you people an even better fanfic! ^_^