Chapter 1: I know this was mentioned before but god bless your intricate descriptions! Luhan and Yixing are already otherworldly creatures as they are, but your descriptions make them so much better! I'm so curious for more of their past stories... like the experiences Luhan and Lay went through together, the organizations behind the "sold secrets to the Koreans" thing! And also Sehun what the -

And I fell out of my chair @ the ending... expected many things but didn't expect that lol you got me! I thought it was gonna shift to hunhan and was just working myself up for excitement at the pairing and disappointment of the end of the so beautifully described layhan, but nooo o.O MY heart was shattered into too many pieces to count! Weirdly enjoyed the ending you chose though. A very enjoyable short fic with plenty of character development that's unusual for a fanfic of this length.

Good job ^^

Chapter 1: First off, I just want to say that your attention to detail (as well as Luhan’s of course) is absolutely s u p e r b. Yixing is an angel when it comes to visuals and your descriptions really do him justice, I love it. The tension and the atmosphere were built so well too and I was looking forward to see if any rated scenes would amount from it, and not going to lie I didn’t expect Luhan to be the top but it’s a wonderful concept and I’m actually very pleasantly surprised! I especially like it how even as a bottom, Yixing doesn’t fit the traditional stereotype of one of being submissive and incapable, just as Luhan doesn’t completely fit the traditional top role of being cold and emotionless - rather, it’s actually kind of switched and Luhan’s emotions are realistically depicted, and that’s one of the components that really makes this one shot great.

The ending though, I’m weeping because half of me knew something like this would happen but the other part of me is a hopeless romantic and I was so anticipating they would resolve their issues. It was beautifully written though and, given their circumstances, completely understandable and realistic and I really commend you for that (especially because I normally don’t read hurt and comfort + angst). This is also the first time I’ve read a romance between Luhan and Yixing but I’m so glad I’ve stumbled across this fic. Overall, thank you for your writing - good job with everything and keep up the great work!

Chapter 1: It's short but descriptive. It's enjoyable enough for 1 AM reads like what I'm doing now. I like how Luhan kept his feelings for a long time for Yixing when the time finally came for both of them to end it, Luhan accepted it.

Luhan is rational while being head over heels. Yixing is mysterious, though. But I like his character. Also "who's the one that sold all our secrets to Korean?" lmfao It's like they're America-Russia. And HunHan at the last scene what why how when

Chapter 1: Wait what so BOTH of them died???