Not So Private Relationship

Description

This was just a scenario that popped in my head 4 months ago. I'm not planning to make a long story out of this. I just want to share it to everyone. :)

Foreword

Ji Hyo (talking to Jong Kook)

Oppa, remember when we were at a friend's housewarming party? You were sitting on the sofa and I was sitting on the floor in between your legs. I leaned back, looked up to you as you drink your shot then you moved your face towards mine and kissed me. I can't forget all the butterflies oppa. ❤

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sa_1109 #1 Dec 9, 2020 15:43:59

Chapter 1: So excited with your writing dear author, hope to see more your update and how you develop your story here .. Hwaiting ^^

spadenoace #2 Dec 22, 2017 18:11:28

Chapter 1: This is a pretty neat idea and the dialogue itself has a lot of potential! I would love to see it as an actual one shot developing this further instead of a simple drabble. Maybe we can start with the dinner ecent where JK takes the first sip of wine and we actually see the kiss happening? Or I really like the first paragraph though the shortness and rhythm of it reminds me of poetry haha so maybe it could be a flashback instead?

And another thing, it would be better to not have it as a script format (unless youre writing like a screenplay or something). Here its only two people so oncr you establish who is talking you can probbly do
"something spoken"
"A reply spoken"
Without the he said, she said if thats what youre having trouble with. And if you do write and check your spelling and capitalization! Keep writing would love to see more

ana177 #3 Dec 22, 2017 00:05:16

Chapter 1: I'm sorry, make long story to the next. I this read as message not ff's story... again i'm sorry dear... but good job to your work i'll waiting~

hyuknajae #4 Dec 21, 2017 22:03:56

Why is it so short???... ?

Mithani #5 Dec 21, 2017 21:29:08

Chapter 1: Try to make it longer

hyuknajae #6 Dec 20, 2017 20:48:59

Continue this story... ☺

nittyayu #7 Dec 20, 2017 08:36:09

Its gonna be a great story!

iamnez #8 Dec 20, 2017 07:23:12

looking forward for your story author-nim :D

Mithani #9 Dec 20, 2017 07:10:30

Update soon