Chapter 1: Oh my! This is a beautiful story. You write this story beautifully. From Luhan was kid up till he met Sehun, just by reading yours I can picture it in my mind. I cried but happy. Something that bothers me is Beakhyun. I don't know whether it is typo or not. Because I think it is Baekhyun. I don't mind with your English because English is not my first language also but I hope you can improve yours from the natives comments. I hope you keep on writing, especially Hunhan stories. Good luck and thank you

Chapter 1: Poor Luhan ;-; He lost his parents and grandmother, but at least he has Sehun ^^
I like your writing style. You're good at conveying emotions through words, and even though there are mistakes in your writing, it doesn't make the story difficult to read. Keep it up!

Chapter 1: This story says there is nobody will being unlucky for their whole life........as a writer you did a good job of playing with an emotions and which will give a sudden change in what readers feel ......... Continue

Unlucky!a overemotional story..... such a nice writing.....especially the starting...... the emotions of that little luhan! That child's innocence!it made me cry..... the flow and the content of the story is beautifully sculpted..... warm and emotional dialogues ..... really worth reading..... keep going .... great writing.... pls write more one shots.... ending made me surprised and laugh❤️

Chapter 1: It's beautiful. I've crying n laughing when reading this. ^_^ so much emotions

Chapter 1: Awww this is a good story <3 thanks for sharinf :)