Chapter 1: Wait, for a first fanfic, this is actually okay-ish? I just don't really understand the ending, the connection between the bear and the drink, nor why the police didn't do anything about the dead body in the house. Not saying this is a bad start to your fan fiction collection, but I would praise this more if it had connections between events in the story, not just bloody murder and heartbreak. Either way, nice story, hope you keep writing!