Department X

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In this world, it isn't just black and white. There are grey areas as well. Department X is a department located so deep into the CIA that nobody knows about them. They report directly to the Prime Minister and their jobs is to settle the things which other agents have failed or problems which are too sensitive to be handled directly by any Secret Services. They are known as Department X because X represents the unknown and each branch on the Letter X represents one of the services they carry out. Sabotage, Corruption, Intellegence and Assination.


 

Foreword

Sitting on the steps of the orphanage, Taeyeon's tears dropped uncontrollably down. Burying her face in her palms, she trembled as the waves of memories washes over her. Behind her, she could hear the faint voices of the social worker talking to Sister Maria, The head of the All Saints Orphanage "Poor child, her parents were killed in this terrible car crash. We couldn't locate any of her relatives so I guess she will have to stay here for now." The social worker said as she took a look at the crying Taeyeon. "She was so lucky that her parents threw her out of vehicle before the truck crashed into their car." Hearing all this, Taeyeon mind drifted back to a day ago, The fateful day where she will never forget.

"Hurry up, we are going to be late for Andy's birthday" Taeyeon's mom screamed at the adjacent door as she hurriedly dressed Taeyeon up in her newly bought white frolly dress and attempted to put on her shoes at the same time. "Coming coming. Honey, should I wear the black or the silver tie?" Taeyeon's dad said as he placed two ties against himself. "Just wear anything. You look good to me even if you are in singlet and shorts," Taeyeon's mom smiled as she adjusted the tie for her husband. After dressing up and grabbing the present from the dresser table, They carried the smiling Taeyeon up from the couch and placed her in the backseat of their car. Revving the engine, Taeyeon's dad hurriedly drove off towards their boss's dinner party. Taeyeon's parents worked for the Kwon Industries as Senior managers and today they were invited to their boss's dinner party as it was his birthday.

As they drove, Taeyeon was whining in the back seat. "Mummy.. I am hungry. Can I eat this lollipop?" Taeyeon asked as her stubby fingers struggled to open the wrapper of the lollipop she held in her hands. "Tae tae, if you eat the lollipop now, you won't have any appetite later" Her mom gently chided her but as she turned back, she saw the pout on Taeyeon's face and she relented. "Ok, only this small one ok?" Smiling, she took the lollipop from Taeyeon's hands and opened the lollipop for her. Grinning the toothy grin, Taeyeon took the opened lollipop from her mom and happily on the lollipop while singing a happy song about loving her mom the most. Just as she was happily enjoying the lollipop, she was thrown to one side roughly, hitting her head on the side of the car door as her dad had suddenly swerved to avoid hitting this car in front of them that was weaving in between 3 lanes. Before Taeyeon could react to the pain on the side of her head, She felt this churning sensation in her stomach as their car spined 360 degrees and after fighting for control, her dad managed to bring the car to a stop. Just then, a set of headlights flashed on their right and it grew brighter and brighter and a loud honking sound deafen her ears. Taeyeon could feel a set of arms carrying her up, she could feel warm blood on her arms and warm tears dropping on her legs. Before she was flung out of the car, she could clearly hear her mom and dad scream their last words. "Taeyeon, remember this... We will always love you." After that, all Taeyeon could see was a flame of fireball rushing up in the air as the truck hit her parent's car. Taeyeon could feel the heat of the explosion on her face, dropping the lollipop on the ground, she began to cry with all her might.

Wham. A ball hit her in the head bringing her back to reality. Taeyeon lifted her face from her palms and realised her palms and legs were wet with her tears. "Hey pabo, throw us the ball" A boy ran towards her. As he bent down to pick up the ball he noticed her puffy eyes and red cheeks. He scream for his friends as they came running surrounding her. "Aww, our newcomer is a cry baby" Chants of crybaby started as they grew louder and louder, coming from everywhere as if she had a set of surround sound system around her. The boys poked her cheeks and pulled her hair. Some made funny faces and the others just laughed at her predicament. Taeyeon flushed and tried her best not to cry as the chants of crybaby grew and at that moment she wished her parents were still by her side, calming her down and telling her its all just a bad dream.

She looked at the faces looming in front of her, bit on her lower lips and before she could do or say anything, she saw a figure rushed in and stood in front of her. Screaming above the chants, the figure glared at the surrounding boys and they quieten down."Yah! Why are you bullying the newcomers again. Do you guys wanna die? She is here meaning she just lost her parents like us and you guys still dare to bully her." Bunching her small fist in front of her, she stood in front of Taeyeon protecting her and letting the guys know that if they wanted to bully Taeyeon somemore, they would have to go through her. After 3 minutes of glaring, the leader of the boys just shrugged and call the boys to go and play football. "Its not we are scared of you, we are just too man to hit girly girls" He shouted behind his shoulder as they ran towards the games area. Watching the boys run away, the figure turned towards Taeyeon and smiled as she extended a hand to her. "Hi newcomer, whats your name? I am Jessica."
 

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colleenorcullo
#1
Chapter 55: SooNa is so sweet T~T
Taengoo311
#2
Chapter 68: Umm why no updates? D:
SunnyandTae
#3
Chapter 32: New reader. Love where it's going. I'm up to the Christmas special and love it. It's written so well. I can't wait to finish :)
badtestament #4
Wuuthraad : Hahaha, well. Not everything will go to their food binges. I will have a part 3 to explain what they did with the money
badtestament #5
Forever9 : Haha, *evil gleams somemore* Maybe I should tell Youngie about your suspicious love for rilakuma.. *rubs hands in glee* YAH dongsaeng, wae you no update childcare chaos... *prepares the darts you loaned me*
Wuuthraad
#6
I now feel bad for Kim Tae Woo, now that he's going to jail and all his cash is going to fund SooNa food binges XD
badtestament #7
Vedasone : Thanks for the comments. =) Really thanks.

Mashipao : I will post my reply on your wall ok?? =D Thanks for reading my fanfic and thanks even more for your detailed comments and improvement suggestions
MashiPao
#8
S: LAST COMMENT! I SWEAR! XD
While reading your story, I noticed the pros and cons of your writing. So I want to give you some advice to make your fic better and your writing overall. :P
First of all, you do research on your topics. Which is really good. it's very easy to tell that you did your research on the guns and whatnot. In fact, would you mind helping me with that kind of stuff? LOl The amount of information within your story (and the gun explanations in the sequel) clearly show the amount of research you did. Few authors do this large amount of research so kudos to you!
Next, you have AMAZING vocabulary and details. ABSOLUTELY AMAZING. Although, your sentences can get a bit awkward at times, it doesn't hide the fact that your details are amazing. However, I think that all the details you have are like a double-edged sword in a sense. It's really great to read a fic with such amazing detail but sometimes it gets...tedious. Your updates are rather short so all I can see is giant paragraph after paragraph. And honestly, it makes me feel like I'm reading an essay instead of a story. So I would recommend maybe taking your giant paragraphs and separating them into smaller ones. That way, it's much easier to read. Not a lot of people want to read giant blocks of text.
Also, your details and whatnot overpower your dialogue. You have more details than you have dialogue. In my opinion, dialogue is what makes a story and fleshes out the characters' personalities. So perhaps add more dialogue into your story?
You have problems writing dialogue as well which is awfully strange because I see you doing it the right way and then you mostly do it the wrong way...such as in Chapter 47. You squish all of your dialogue into one paragraph which is incorrect. (And it causes many readers to run away LOL) There must be a new paragraph every time a new person speaks.
So I'm done. Whew that took a long time to type up. Anyway, I hope you enjoyed and found my comments useful~
MashiPao
#9
Moving on to the next comment! LOL I don't know...I might hit a new high and have to write three comments. I still have much to say. :P Just a heads up, I read teh sequel too so I'll be squishing everything in the comments here. XD
Anyway, continuing about Tiffany. Thumbs up for continuity. I noticed you still had pink dossiers in your sequel. Hehe sorry I just like it when the author stays consistent. I always have smile on my face every time Tiffany enters the cafe: walks/runs in like a boss then glomps everyone. XD (Also yay for slight Taenyish moment in the sequel haha).
Moving on to the highlight of the story that I found the most amusing: Jessica's and Taeyeon's test to get into Department X. Haha it was great. Cucumbers and roasted cockroaches? Wow. Must've been hell. The examiners weren't very smart when they decided not to tie up Jessica's feet. XD Aso I love the background of the Cafe with No Name. I LOL'd at such the lame name and LOL'd even harder when you said "Taeyeon's creativeness". Nice Touch. :)
Moving on the main plot of the story, I must say the Department X definitely have their feet stuck in a pile of crap. Especially Sooyoung. D: It was so sad when she left. Also, I was so surprised at the end when Seohyun drugged Hyoyeon. Why SEOHYUN? WHY? T_T Honestly, I never expected Seohyun of all people. She's too nice and stuff. But you know, the nicest people are probably the most evil and sinister (Does that make me evil? LOL). Going into the sequel, I wonder if Sunny and Hyomin will really fall in love with each other especially since Hyomin is taking such good care of Sunny in the hospital...while Sunny's lover is sulking around, seeking Tiffany for refuge...Shame, Taeyeon. If Sunny caught you, she might have to request you to get into bed immediately. XD Hehe I'm an avid Taeny fan so I'm content with the Taeny development. :P But anyway, Seohyun, why are you so EVIL?! T_T Evil! D: Augghhh...Well, I'm running out of space again. LOL