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More Than Just 'Arranged'

I must admit that arranged marriage fics are very common in this site and even in dramas. This was what made me subtract a point from originality. Though you did give your own twist to the plot, I felt that the typical stereotypes of a girl and a guy in a drama still stood out. The main guy's cool facade but in truth, childish nature is one character that could capture most readers' attention and of course, most fics are incomplete without some scenes that would induce jealousy. What I'm trying to say is it's not wrong to write these usual plots, but you could have given the characters a specific trait or habit or maybe even put a unique event that could deviate this fic from other arranged marriage fics out there.

Next, most of the fic was an easy read but there were some parts that disrupted the flow since some word choices were quite off. An example could be that the word you used is the homophone of what is appropriate in that specific context. (e.g. layed and laid) I would also suggest that the transition of Baekhyun's and the girl's relationship at the start should be given more details. At a certain point, I felt as if they were moving on too fast.

Fourth, I'm not usually too keen on grammar, but I noticed that more often than not, punctuation marks were wrongly used or were missing. It's important to use a period instead of a comma and to know when to start a new sentence since wrong application of these rules unsettles a lot of readers. Another is conjugation of verbs and subject-verb-agreement. I know this is quite hard to keep track of, but it is important to have consistency with your verbs. If in the sentence you used a past tense verb, usually, it would be correct to continue with that tense. Also, be aware of the subject that needs to be paired with the singular or plural form of the verb. 

Last, instead of following the word count I placed on my reviewer's profile, I decided to finish it until the end since the couple had some sweet moments and I wondered how they would actually build up they're relationship after Taeyeon appeared. Your idea for the fic can be seen through your writing and so far there is a focus since there's not too much events happening at once. 

Everyone has his or her own writing style. Keep writing and I'm sure experience would develop you as a writer. With your imagination and a means for writing, anything is possible. :D

-BeRightBaek

Foreward and Description: 3/5
Creativity/Originality: 4/5
Word Choice: 4/5
Flow of Story: 4/5
Grammar: 7/10
Overall enjoyment: 17/20

Total points: 39/50

Comments: 
First off, for the description, I think it would be better to put a few sentences that would capture the readers' attention and make them curious. It is after all, the only part they see when scanning through tons of fics here in AFF. Also, since More than just 'arranged' is your title, I suggest that you capitalize the first letters.