My First Fanfic

Hey guys,
I wrote my first fanfic today. It took about 40 minutes and is probably horrible, but I figured I'd ask for some constructive criticism here. Is there anything that I should be doing differently in my writing?
Obviously it's a bit rough especially toward the end since it was a single draft and took only a small amount of time, but I would really love if you could check it out. (:
http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/1215137/we-got-married-and-i-want-a-divorce-jongtae
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