This isn't a fanfiction or anything I'm just starting a new book and want to know if the opening is interesting enough to make 

people wanna keep reading, so please comment what you think? Tell me where I can improve, what was good etc 

that'd be a great help

"I never gave much thought on how I would die. Funny, how it all ends up back here, held in the jaws of a creature so terrifying, the only way I could be sure I wasn't having a nightmare, was the bone-crushing pain in my legs, and the blood pouring hot over my ripped jeans. No one ever anticipates their death, but ordinary people have some idea how it might go. I'm sure you've thought about your death at least once. I bet your life goes something like this; you're born, you go to school meet some friends, maybe go to college meet new friends, maybe have a family, maybe get a good job, whatever it might be, ordinary people imagine their deaths in a much more romantic version than the reality. Passing away in their sleep, or dying of old age, maybe in a car accident, or a freak skiing accident. 'Normal' deaths. For normal, average, everyday people. I almost envy you. Never, when I walked into that musty old book-store, did I imagine my life would end up here. You see, I'm not like normal people. Oh no. I wish I was. I wish I was some average teenage girl, who's biggest worry was the pimple on her forehead, or her new shirt that shrunk in the wash. I do. I really do wish these were my problems. My life would be infinitely easier. I wouldn't be slowly getting crushed to death by sharp fangs, screaming in agony, only to hear the cruel almost laughter-like howl of the creature that held me in its grasp.

Tell me something. If you come to a fork in the road, which way do you turn? Left or right? Let's say to the left is green grass and pretty flowers, and to the right there's dust and ash and nothing. You'd turn left yes? Of course you would. But let's say you were blind. The choice means nothing to you doesn't it, because it doesn't matter which way you turn, you still can't see. They say love is blind, and I think I understand that now more than most. Well, except maybe those girls that end up falling in love with vampires, gotta feel sorry for those ers. Haha, get it? Vampire joke. Oh Cleo you're on a roll tonight girl. As a matter of fact, your legs might actually be rolling soon, at least I wish they would. Wish someone would just come and take them off, end this pain. Oh well, at least I get a good view of brutishly evil yellow eyes before I sink into oblivion. Does your life always flash before your eyes before you die?"